What Makes a Sexy After-Sex Scene?

I’m working on rewrites of my upcoming re-release, Chase and Seduction, book one of the Hot Country series. One thing I notice far too often as I read books, is that the afterglow scenes are often rushed or even ignored.

shirtless wet muscular man in jeans and woman hands, studio shot

The afterglow snuggling is where our characters’ emotions pour forth. They’re in each other’s arms, both satisfied and exhausted . What are they thinking? Do they keep it to themselves, or do they share with their partner? There may be a few sensual descriptions – an aftershock, a sore muscle, panting breaths, a racing heart. But mostly, we want to have feelings surfacing.

This first draft version of an afterglow scene is in Chase’s point of view – he’s a country western superstar, but he’s insecure about their relationship, and he doesn’t know how to bring up the subject of their future.

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He smiled and kissed her forehead. Could this mean she was thinking about long-term as well?

He shook off the tension building in his shoulders. For now, he was damn happy just having her in his arms.

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The scene tells us what’s going on, but it doesn’t go deep inside Chase’s heart and soul.

Here’s the same scene, written with emotion:

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He smiled and kissed her forehead. Could this mean she was thinking about long-term as well?

When should he ask her? How? He made his living with words, but this was different. These words weren’t meant for millions to hear, they were meant for only one perfect woman, and he had to get it right the first time.

He shook off the tension building in his shoulders. When the time was right, he’d know it, and the right words would flow from the poet side of his brain. For now, he was damn happy just having her in his arms.

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Now we know what’s going on inside Chase’s head. Notice how I didn’t leave the afterglow scene completely fuzzy and happy? I put a little nervous tension in there too, a little uncertainty and angst. Made it a little more interesting, didn’t it?

Hope all your afterglows are wonderful!
Randi
“Rode Hard and Put Up Satisfied”
RandiAlexander.com
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5 thoughts on “What Makes a Sexy After-Sex Scene?

  1. suzlyne

    Scenes like that are why you’re the writer and I’m the reader. I would have written the first one! LOL!!!

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    • Randi Alexander

      I enjoy taking the bare bones of a scene and making it come to life. Well, it does in my own head, anyway! LOL Thanks for dropping in!

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  2. Randi, I don’t see anything wrong in your after sex scenes. My opinion is cuddling and even laughing is something that can come after the sex. I feel that if a couple care enough to have sex they can laugh together. I have always loved men who could make me laugh. So I say write a scene that the have the couple having fun, have them laughing and cutting up.

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  3. love the afterglow, Randi. Yes, I definitely wish more authors would spend time on the afterglow. I’m guessing it’s at least half that I write/read BDSM erotic romance, but for me, the after part is just as important as the sex/BDSM activity itself because I’m thinking on the very real need for aftercare, especially if the activities have been very intense.

    But I do love the emotion you bring to the second sample

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  4. darkwriter67

    Reblogged this on Illuminite Caliginosus.

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